Tree Roots (sijo)
Tree rootsA tall and ancient tree with massive trunk and outspread branchesendows the cloisters space with shade, refreshing for the monks;but tree roots quietly move between the stones; so will the...
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Nicely done, davie! this reads well, and I like the twist you've used ... perhaps the lovely shade tree will be their undoing in the end ...(I do count 17 syllables in the final line, which I believe...
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Have to agree with Beth here...great image, and thoughtful twist......the 17 syllables does pull the rhythm out slightly in the last line, but easily fixed! Great to see you trying these, Davie! Every...
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Beth and Paul,Thanks for your comments. Yes, you're right - it's because I tend to say "quartly" instead of "quayetly"! I think I'll solve it by saying "but hidden tree roots move ..."It's a nice...
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